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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Ghost Stories / Paranormal
- Published: 04/20/2012
Something mysterious
Born 2000, F, from NSW, Australia“Yeah we are going on a camping trip” I screamed. Today was going to be the best day ever. It’s my sixteenth birthday and I get to go with my best friend Sara. But all that feeling was gone. I felt chills down my spine when we were driving down this isolated road with empty fields on both sides. I was bored of talking so I stared out of the window. Something captured my eyes. it was a figure, a girl with long hair. Then I blinked and it was gone. I wondered how it disappeared in a number of seconds. there were no trees around. The more I wondered the more I thought it was my imagination. Sara turned to look at me with wide eyes. “What’s wrong” she asked. I decided not to tell.
“Ummm, it was nothing. just amazed that it’s so empty around here”.
“By the looks on your face I think you're lying to me”
“Uh it’s nothing”, I mumbled.
“Just admit it Karina, I know something is wrong”, Sara demanded.
“Ok already, just don’t think that I’m crazy but I saw a figure in the fields of a girl with long hair”.
“Hahahahahaha, that’s so funny. mum got a story to tell you, now I saw her too, you know I was just messing around with you”.
“Mrs. Ginaheart can you tell me the story, please”, I asked.
Sara's mother told the story. it was spooky. the more she talks about it the more I feel like I wasn’t there at all. The story goes to many years back when the two fields on both side used to have a community of people. it was a town called Hollow hills. there was a girl in the town that disappeared one day, she vanished without a trace. There was only one person who saw her that day, it was her mother. She was going to a friend's house down the road. There were lots of rumours going around that day saying that she might have drowned in the lake nearby. others would say that she might have committed suicide somewhere hidden. but many would say that the woods there were haunted and have taken her. No one knows the real story because that girl and her body was never found. There was many sighting of her in the town but she disappears all the time. Everyone decided to move after seeing her. even cops from everywhere would give warnings to the community. After a few month the whole community was gone including her mother. From that day on the whole town was demolished. nothing was left. Only the ghostly figure of the girl.
“Karina, I feel the chills now. mum can you turn on the heater and Devin and Laura turn off the Gameboy would you“, Sara pleaded.
I look out of the window again. this time I was freaked, as in I wanted to disappear from that car forever. There she was, no facial feature, but only the thin smirking smile of the girl. She was floating behind the car. I was so freaked I couldn’t move. I looked again, this time she was much closer. There I screamed “go faster and faster quick”. Sara decided to see what was wrong and she saw the girl too. she squeezed me so hard that I didn’t have air. We were both scared. Her mother drove faster and turned a left curve and the girl couldn’t move anymore and disappeared.
After a few minutes we arrived at the camping ground. I felt the chills again. Sara felt it too.
“I have a bad feeling about this place”, Sara mumbled. We all left the car at that point, leaving her behind. but something happened that I couldn’t see. Sara ran out of the car screaming. I asked “what’s wrong?”, but got the reply “let’s get out of here”. It was my birthday and the first time we got to go camping together so I told her to stay. We all rent out to our cabins. Me and Sara and Laura were in cabin 113 and Devin plus Sara's mother were in cabin 432. We were the unlucky one. our cabin was down this trail across a bridge and into the woods and up the hill. Once we reach there the three of us would hear laughter and little kids screaming in the cabin. So I called her mother to see if anyone had rented the cabin first and didn’t leave yet. But her reply gave me the chills. “Karina dear everyone there left three weeks ago”. I was freaked. I asked my best friend to leave, but she said that she was tired and her sis was too. So we went up the steps onto the veranda. It was cold. way too cold for summer.
When we were inside something caught my eyes when I was closing the door behind me. There standing maybe six metres from the door was the same girl with long hair, her head hung low this time. Freaked out I shut the door fast and ran into the one bedroom down the hallway. Sara was in the bathroom and opened the door shouting what was wrong. Laura was scared. she was sitting by a window covered in blankets. I asked what happened and she started pointing to where the lake was. I looked out and by that time Sara joined in too. Out of the window was the same girl and this time Laura saw it too. The girl seemed so sad, but something was different about her, she was wet. We all were scared so we took out the sandwiches to eat to control our hunger and covered the window. then we all slept in one bed next to a wall not the window.
During the night was scary. I was not a heavy sleeper, nor even Sara. We both woke up to a familiar sound. We both heard footsteps. our room door was open. We stared out of the dark hallway not seeing anything. by the time a few minutes past we heard a noise in the kitchen. then a few knocks on the door and the closet opened wide, then shut, then opened and we saw the girl again. she was pointing out of the window then disappeared. We were scared out of our living daylight by this time. So we hid under the blanket the whole night.
The next morning Laura asked us if we were pulling her hair and tapping her back at night. We told her we didn’t do it because we were under the blanket the whole night. She was freaked but we couldn’t get out of the cabin until the next day when we were supposed to go home. Sara's mother knocked on the door and Devin wasn’t there. So we all decided to tell about our events at night and her mother got scared. Sara's mother told us that she will stay with us since Devin has new friends now.
We all went to the lake to go swimming. Something happened there that we will remember for the rest of our lives. We were all swimming when we all spotted the girl with long hair. she was struggling in the water. Sara's mother was worried so she swam to the girl but when she got there the girl just disappeared the same way she appeared. Her mother was shocked. she thought that the poor girl had drowned. She called the cops and they thought she was crazy. Sara and I told her that we were going to the reception area. When we got permission we set off. In the woods was scary. we saw the girl again covered in what seemed to be blood. She was following us fast. Sara got so scared that she dragged me out of that wood. But I told her that something was wrong and the way she was always following us we should go back even if we were frightened.
Back in the woods the girl was standing there head down. I went slowly to her and asked what her name was, where she came from, and how she died. All I got was, I’m the girl who vanished from Hallow hills. me and Sara got this vision in our head on that day she was going to a friend's house and instead of going the short way through her backyard she decided to go the long way. A man driving a black car, a Honda, was following her and she didn’t notice it. He got out and hit her head, knocking her out. Then there was more vision. he dragged her into the car and drove to the woods here deciding to cut her in pieces, but couldn’t because he heard something and so he ran to the lake and threw her in. she woke up at that time. due to the pain she struggled and drowned. We fainted that time.
After, we woke up in the cabin again, this time with Sara's mother by our side asking what happened. We told her and she was worried and called the cops and manager. When the cops came we told them that there was a girl's body there in the lake and she was kidnapped and murdered from Hallow hills. The cops declared it was a crime scene there and the police diver went into the lake. Amazingly, where we last saw her drowned they found the body. It was gross, bloody, her long hair heavy and wet. We all prayed for her and left. but something happened to the cops. they all saw her and were freaked.
“Thank you, everyone. I’m so glad that you have found me”.
Something mysterious(Jen Yuri Amaya Tran)
“Yeah we are going on a camping trip” I screamed. Today was going to be the best day ever. It’s my sixteenth birthday and I get to go with my best friend Sara. But all that feeling was gone. I felt chills down my spine when we were driving down this isolated road with empty fields on both sides. I was bored of talking so I stared out of the window. Something captured my eyes. it was a figure, a girl with long hair. Then I blinked and it was gone. I wondered how it disappeared in a number of seconds. there were no trees around. The more I wondered the more I thought it was my imagination. Sara turned to look at me with wide eyes. “What’s wrong” she asked. I decided not to tell.
“Ummm, it was nothing. just amazed that it’s so empty around here”.
“By the looks on your face I think you're lying to me”
“Uh it’s nothing”, I mumbled.
“Just admit it Karina, I know something is wrong”, Sara demanded.
“Ok already, just don’t think that I’m crazy but I saw a figure in the fields of a girl with long hair”.
“Hahahahahaha, that’s so funny. mum got a story to tell you, now I saw her too, you know I was just messing around with you”.
“Mrs. Ginaheart can you tell me the story, please”, I asked.
Sara's mother told the story. it was spooky. the more she talks about it the more I feel like I wasn’t there at all. The story goes to many years back when the two fields on both side used to have a community of people. it was a town called Hollow hills. there was a girl in the town that disappeared one day, she vanished without a trace. There was only one person who saw her that day, it was her mother. She was going to a friend's house down the road. There were lots of rumours going around that day saying that she might have drowned in the lake nearby. others would say that she might have committed suicide somewhere hidden. but many would say that the woods there were haunted and have taken her. No one knows the real story because that girl and her body was never found. There was many sighting of her in the town but she disappears all the time. Everyone decided to move after seeing her. even cops from everywhere would give warnings to the community. After a few month the whole community was gone including her mother. From that day on the whole town was demolished. nothing was left. Only the ghostly figure of the girl.
“Karina, I feel the chills now. mum can you turn on the heater and Devin and Laura turn off the Gameboy would you“, Sara pleaded.
I look out of the window again. this time I was freaked, as in I wanted to disappear from that car forever. There she was, no facial feature, but only the thin smirking smile of the girl. She was floating behind the car. I was so freaked I couldn’t move. I looked again, this time she was much closer. There I screamed “go faster and faster quick”. Sara decided to see what was wrong and she saw the girl too. she squeezed me so hard that I didn’t have air. We were both scared. Her mother drove faster and turned a left curve and the girl couldn’t move anymore and disappeared.
After a few minutes we arrived at the camping ground. I felt the chills again. Sara felt it too.
“I have a bad feeling about this place”, Sara mumbled. We all left the car at that point, leaving her behind. but something happened that I couldn’t see. Sara ran out of the car screaming. I asked “what’s wrong?”, but got the reply “let’s get out of here”. It was my birthday and the first time we got to go camping together so I told her to stay. We all rent out to our cabins. Me and Sara and Laura were in cabin 113 and Devin plus Sara's mother were in cabin 432. We were the unlucky one. our cabin was down this trail across a bridge and into the woods and up the hill. Once we reach there the three of us would hear laughter and little kids screaming in the cabin. So I called her mother to see if anyone had rented the cabin first and didn’t leave yet. But her reply gave me the chills. “Karina dear everyone there left three weeks ago”. I was freaked. I asked my best friend to leave, but she said that she was tired and her sis was too. So we went up the steps onto the veranda. It was cold. way too cold for summer.
When we were inside something caught my eyes when I was closing the door behind me. There standing maybe six metres from the door was the same girl with long hair, her head hung low this time. Freaked out I shut the door fast and ran into the one bedroom down the hallway. Sara was in the bathroom and opened the door shouting what was wrong. Laura was scared. she was sitting by a window covered in blankets. I asked what happened and she started pointing to where the lake was. I looked out and by that time Sara joined in too. Out of the window was the same girl and this time Laura saw it too. The girl seemed so sad, but something was different about her, she was wet. We all were scared so we took out the sandwiches to eat to control our hunger and covered the window. then we all slept in one bed next to a wall not the window.
During the night was scary. I was not a heavy sleeper, nor even Sara. We both woke up to a familiar sound. We both heard footsteps. our room door was open. We stared out of the dark hallway not seeing anything. by the time a few minutes past we heard a noise in the kitchen. then a few knocks on the door and the closet opened wide, then shut, then opened and we saw the girl again. she was pointing out of the window then disappeared. We were scared out of our living daylight by this time. So we hid under the blanket the whole night.
The next morning Laura asked us if we were pulling her hair and tapping her back at night. We told her we didn’t do it because we were under the blanket the whole night. She was freaked but we couldn’t get out of the cabin until the next day when we were supposed to go home. Sara's mother knocked on the door and Devin wasn’t there. So we all decided to tell about our events at night and her mother got scared. Sara's mother told us that she will stay with us since Devin has new friends now.
We all went to the lake to go swimming. Something happened there that we will remember for the rest of our lives. We were all swimming when we all spotted the girl with long hair. she was struggling in the water. Sara's mother was worried so she swam to the girl but when she got there the girl just disappeared the same way she appeared. Her mother was shocked. she thought that the poor girl had drowned. She called the cops and they thought she was crazy. Sara and I told her that we were going to the reception area. When we got permission we set off. In the woods was scary. we saw the girl again covered in what seemed to be blood. She was following us fast. Sara got so scared that she dragged me out of that wood. But I told her that something was wrong and the way she was always following us we should go back even if we were frightened.
Back in the woods the girl was standing there head down. I went slowly to her and asked what her name was, where she came from, and how she died. All I got was, I’m the girl who vanished from Hallow hills. me and Sara got this vision in our head on that day she was going to a friend's house and instead of going the short way through her backyard she decided to go the long way. A man driving a black car, a Honda, was following her and she didn’t notice it. He got out and hit her head, knocking her out. Then there was more vision. he dragged her into the car and drove to the woods here deciding to cut her in pieces, but couldn’t because he heard something and so he ran to the lake and threw her in. she woke up at that time. due to the pain she struggled and drowned. We fainted that time.
After, we woke up in the cabin again, this time with Sara's mother by our side asking what happened. We told her and she was worried and called the cops and manager. When the cops came we told them that there was a girl's body there in the lake and she was kidnapped and murdered from Hallow hills. The cops declared it was a crime scene there and the police diver went into the lake. Amazingly, where we last saw her drowned they found the body. It was gross, bloody, her long hair heavy and wet. We all prayed for her and left. but something happened to the cops. they all saw her and were freaked.
“Thank you, everyone. I’m so glad that you have found me”.
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