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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Mystery
- Published: 09/29/2023
The Haunting Fall
Adult, F, from Mianwali, Pakistan![The Haunting Fall](/storage/story/5595288D-51EF-32B0-A180-2BFA3E76DA04_1696053976-image(285x285-crop).png)
The thunder roared, and the wind howled. The stormy night sent shivers down her spine. She was all alone on that deserted path. The sudden drop in temperature gave her goosebumps. She was sure about the existence of something malevolent there. Suddenly, she saw a man with a knife in his hand running towards her. He had an unsettling aura. His gaze was intense, and he had a pale complexion. He followed her . The girl ran as fast as she could. Unfortunately, she stumbled upon something and fell. Her hand was bruised. The eerie man came closer to her. She got up and ran again. The man followed her. She ran as fast as she could. While running, Â she looked back to see how far she had come from that man but unfortunately, she fell from the mountaintop into the river. Eventually, she woke up and realised it was a nightmare, though there was a bruise on her hand.
The Haunting Fall(Aleena Nawaz) The thunder roared, and the wind howled. The stormy night sent shivers down her spine. She was all alone on that deserted path. The sudden drop in temperature gave her goosebumps. She was sure about the existence of something malevolent there. Suddenly, she saw a man with a knife in his hand running towards her. He had an unsettling aura. His gaze was intense, and he had a pale complexion. He followed her . The girl ran as fast as she could. Unfortunately, she stumbled upon something and fell. Her hand was bruised. The eerie man came closer to her. She got up and ran again. The man followed her. She ran as fast as she could. While running, Â she looked back to see how far she had come from that man but unfortunately, she fell from the mountaintop into the river. Eventually, she woke up and realised it was a nightmare, though there was a bruise on her hand.
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Charles Walter
10/15/2023Your writing has a captivating quality that keeps readers engaged from beginning to end.
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Mike
10/14/2023Very well written and framed. You created a image in my mind of how it actually was and i was even able to imagine her waking up and realising it was a nightmare. Good job!
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Mahnoor Mani
10/13/2023I absolutely agree with all the comments. You have created a masterpiece, Aleena. Well done.
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Soniya sameer
10/13/2023What a suspense tale! The writing style and the choice of words are perfect. The eerie nature of the story is excellent. I loved it.
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Taniya Verma
10/12/2023This story is full of suspense. I loved it. Wonderful piece of writing, ma'am Aleena.
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Freddie Thomas
09/30/2023A very well-written story. It's suspense element is remarkable. The combo of horror and mystery is impressive.
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Dr. Albert Hunter
09/30/2023It's a well-crafted story. The plot is intriguing. You have a great ability to craft an engaging prose. It's an incredible story!
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Charles Walter
09/30/2023Aleena, your exceptional storytelling abilities captivate the readers from the start till the end of the story. You're an amazing author.
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