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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Family & Friends
- Subject: Adventure
- Published: 03/23/2022
There was this boy named Alejandro who had tanned skin, black hair, and brown eyes. He was one of the nicest people you would ever meet because he had such a pure heart and that made him popular. He was also the captain of the soccer team and wanted to become a professional soccer player. One Friday Alejandro went to the carnival in San Pedro de Pinta with three of his closest friends called Rodrigo, Nicolas, and Emmanuel. When they arrived at the Carnival they bought the bracelet so they could have unlimited rides all afternoon and night. They went to the food court area and ate everything including tacos, churros, cotton candy, etc. They went to the best mechanical rides like El Tornillo, Bumper Cars, Moving Tea Cups, etc.
When they were in the Line for bumper cars Alejandro was on the opposite side of the Line where there was a huge sign that said “EXIT”.
Soon after that, the people who were on the ride started getting down and Alejandro did not notice so a bunch of about 10 people ran off the ride and off the stairs and threw him off to the ground. Alejandro flew and fell to the ground with his foot all twisted.
He screamed “AAAAAAAAAHHHHHH”
Rodrigo ran to see what had happened to Alejandro and he saw his foot all twisted around and Alejandro was crying streams of rivers. Rodrigo screamed to Nicolas to call his parents.
Nicolas started calling Alejandro's parents explaining the incident in the carnival. DIING DIIING “Hello? I am Nicolas. Alejandro’s Friend. You need to come to the carnival right now. He got injured and needs to go to the hospital. Can you hurry up and come please?”
The parents did not reply. “I DON'T KNOW IF THEY ARE COMING. '' Nicolas screamed.
They picked up Alejandro from the ground and took him to a chair to wait and see if Alejandro’s parents arrived. About 15 minutes later Emmanuel saw Alejandro’s parents running all around the carnival looking at every side for Alejandro.
Emmanuel screamed “OVER HERE!!” and his parents immediately turned around and ran towards them.
They were so worried and were panting so loud. “Alejandro WHAT HAPPENED
?!” exclaimed his mom.
Alejandro did not reply, he just pointed at his foot and a loud scream emerged from Alejandro’s mom's mouth and suddenly she fainted.
The whole foot was turned to the other side. “CALL THE AMBULANCE NOW!”
Everyone was waiting anxiously for the ambulance to arrive. About 15 minutes later there was a loud sound “BEEEEEP BEEEEP BEEEP” It was the ambulance arriving. Nicolas and Rodrigo carried Alejandro to the paramedics. They put Alejandro in the bed and inside the ambulance. Alejandro’s mom was already conscious and hopped in the ambulance with Alejandro. As for Alejandro’s dad, he took the car and Nicolas, Rodrigo, and Emmanuel with him. Alejandro was crying a lot and once they arrived at the hospital he was rushed into the Emergency Room. Alejandro’s dad and his friends waited in the waiting room till it was okay for them to enter the room and visit Alejandro. Once Alejandro and his mom were in the emergency room getting an x-ray to see what had happened. They waited about 20 minutes for the results and suddenly the doctor arrived with a very serious face. Alejandro was really nervous because he wanted to play soccer and soon become a professional soccer player.
The doctor said “I have news. Alejandro has had a very serious injury in which he broke every bone in his foot, this tragically is not reparable we will have to amputate his foot. If there is the luck we can find another foot and replace it.”
Alejandro and his mom started crying a lot. Alejandro sobbed “I CAN’T LOSE MY FOOT! I HAVE A LIFE AHEAD OF ME AND MY SOCCER PASSION!”
Alejandro’s mom couldn’t believe it. Her face turned white and she fainted AGAIN!
“You need to stay here in the hospital until the surgery on 3 days. Meanwhile, we will get you set up in a better room and will put something on your foot.” The doctor said as he was leaving the room.
Alejandro’s dad and his friends could now enter the room and they rushed inside.
“What happened? Why did your mom faint?” Said, Emmanuel.
“Well she fainted because I am getting my foot amputated and that if there is luck they can find a replacement,” said Alejandro.
Everyone was shocked with their mouths to the floor. A few months later Alejandro did have his foot amputated but the doctors luckily did find a replacement for the foot and they put it on him. Today he is still adjusting to the new foot and learning to use it and walk with it. Hopefully, soon he will be able to play soccer again and fulfill his wish.
Carnival Tragedy(Corde Hernandez)
There was this boy named Alejandro who had tanned skin, black hair, and brown eyes. He was one of the nicest people you would ever meet because he had such a pure heart and that made him popular. He was also the captain of the soccer team and wanted to become a professional soccer player. One Friday Alejandro went to the carnival in San Pedro de Pinta with three of his closest friends called Rodrigo, Nicolas, and Emmanuel. When they arrived at the Carnival they bought the bracelet so they could have unlimited rides all afternoon and night. They went to the food court area and ate everything including tacos, churros, cotton candy, etc. They went to the best mechanical rides like El Tornillo, Bumper Cars, Moving Tea Cups, etc.
When they were in the Line for bumper cars Alejandro was on the opposite side of the Line where there was a huge sign that said “EXIT”.
Soon after that, the people who were on the ride started getting down and Alejandro did not notice so a bunch of about 10 people ran off the ride and off the stairs and threw him off to the ground. Alejandro flew and fell to the ground with his foot all twisted.
He screamed “AAAAAAAAAHHHHHH”
Rodrigo ran to see what had happened to Alejandro and he saw his foot all twisted around and Alejandro was crying streams of rivers. Rodrigo screamed to Nicolas to call his parents.
Nicolas started calling Alejandro's parents explaining the incident in the carnival. DIING DIIING “Hello? I am Nicolas. Alejandro’s Friend. You need to come to the carnival right now. He got injured and needs to go to the hospital. Can you hurry up and come please?”
The parents did not reply. “I DON'T KNOW IF THEY ARE COMING. '' Nicolas screamed.
They picked up Alejandro from the ground and took him to a chair to wait and see if Alejandro’s parents arrived. About 15 minutes later Emmanuel saw Alejandro’s parents running all around the carnival looking at every side for Alejandro.
Emmanuel screamed “OVER HERE!!” and his parents immediately turned around and ran towards them.
They were so worried and were panting so loud. “Alejandro WHAT HAPPENED
?!” exclaimed his mom.
Alejandro did not reply, he just pointed at his foot and a loud scream emerged from Alejandro’s mom's mouth and suddenly she fainted.
The whole foot was turned to the other side. “CALL THE AMBULANCE NOW!”
Everyone was waiting anxiously for the ambulance to arrive. About 15 minutes later there was a loud sound “BEEEEEP BEEEEP BEEEP” It was the ambulance arriving. Nicolas and Rodrigo carried Alejandro to the paramedics. They put Alejandro in the bed and inside the ambulance. Alejandro’s mom was already conscious and hopped in the ambulance with Alejandro. As for Alejandro’s dad, he took the car and Nicolas, Rodrigo, and Emmanuel with him. Alejandro was crying a lot and once they arrived at the hospital he was rushed into the Emergency Room. Alejandro’s dad and his friends waited in the waiting room till it was okay for them to enter the room and visit Alejandro. Once Alejandro and his mom were in the emergency room getting an x-ray to see what had happened. They waited about 20 minutes for the results and suddenly the doctor arrived with a very serious face. Alejandro was really nervous because he wanted to play soccer and soon become a professional soccer player.
The doctor said “I have news. Alejandro has had a very serious injury in which he broke every bone in his foot, this tragically is not reparable we will have to amputate his foot. If there is the luck we can find another foot and replace it.”
Alejandro and his mom started crying a lot. Alejandro sobbed “I CAN’T LOSE MY FOOT! I HAVE A LIFE AHEAD OF ME AND MY SOCCER PASSION!”
Alejandro’s mom couldn’t believe it. Her face turned white and she fainted AGAIN!
“You need to stay here in the hospital until the surgery on 3 days. Meanwhile, we will get you set up in a better room and will put something on your foot.” The doctor said as he was leaving the room.
Alejandro’s dad and his friends could now enter the room and they rushed inside.
“What happened? Why did your mom faint?” Said, Emmanuel.
“Well she fainted because I am getting my foot amputated and that if there is luck they can find a replacement,” said Alejandro.
Everyone was shocked with their mouths to the floor. A few months later Alejandro did have his foot amputated but the doctors luckily did find a replacement for the foot and they put it on him. Today he is still adjusting to the new foot and learning to use it and walk with it. Hopefully, soon he will be able to play soccer again and fulfill his wish.
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Natalie Fiehn
03/30/2022I like how detailed your descriptions are. After getting his new foot, was Alejandro able to play soccer again or did he struggle to play again? I liked your story because some parts of the story seems realistic.
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Any Santos
03/30/2022Corde's story had a very good plot because it was at a Carnival wich makes a lot of sense to the story. She includes dialogue and sound effects to what was occuring the in the story for example the ambulance. I love the character's names and this connects with something that had happened to Corde when she was little she just changed the story a lot and exaggerated it.
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