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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Horror
- Subject: Horror / Scary
- Published: 08/05/2018
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The Awaken
The sunlight seeping through the featherlike clouds, brought a nice warmth to my bare body. I awake to a soft tickle on my nose, and a delicate purr coming from a beautiful white fox. He has the most beautiful icy blue eyes, such soft fluffy fur, his fur is so silky and pure.
As I get up from the semi-cold ground, I can feel the cold air hit me, along with shivers down my spine as the snow seeps through my naked feet. I’m not freezing but I realize it is cold and wintry as I see the white fog come from my breath. I feel a delicate tickle across my leg, to see the beautiful fox look up at me, swivelling around my ankles. My mind fills with confusion on why this fox is with me, and why I am here. I give attention to the view around me, as my mind fills with more confusion and fear of where I am. It does not bother me much because the beautiful white, snow covered ground that is topped with beautiful hills and icy mountains that seem to go on forever, like a blanket the skies drape the pleasing view, which brings a comforting feeling to my body. The view is so beautiful it takes away my confusion and fear. This place is all the things I love put into one area. Maybe i’m in a dream, because everything seems to be so perfect.
As I wander the beautiful area I realize that i’m alone and decide to call it Dreamland. For some reason the beautiful fox seems to be following me everywhere I go, he’s like my little guardian in my dream. After wandering for what seems to be hours, I finally find something interesting, a beautiful ice cave. The fox gives me a different look than usual. I decide to enter the cave without having any second thoughts. As I enter, I am suddenly hit with a different feeling, an unusual feeling. The fox seems to be telling me not to go as I see his face change to a sad expression, but why should I even listen to an animal. I decide to go in further.
The more I enter this beautiful ice cave the more nervous I seem to get. I look to the fox to see he is becoming weak, tired and he looks like he is scared or cold by the shivers. Then it hits me, a memory I never want to remember.
“Mia I don’t want to go in,” my little sister said in a whining tone.
“Come on it’s not even that bad Ava,” I tell her.
As she looks at me I can tell she is about to cry and run back to Dad, for some reason ever since our Mom died all Ava can do is cry and run to Dad. My Dad would just sit there and do nothing about it, he isn’t taking the role of a father anymore. We tend to always be fighting, which is probably why Ava is always so sad.
“Come on, it’ll be fun, there is nothing to be worried about,” I reassure her.
“What about Dad, won’t he miss us?” she asks as she catches her breath.
I laugh, “Ava, do you really think I’ll just leave Dad alone, he needs us.”
“But… but it looks scary,” she whimpers as she looks into the cave.
“Ava, we will be back just before dinner and I’ll hold your hand the whole time, there is nothing to be afraid of,” comforting her just like our mom did.
“But...but”
“I will be with you the whole time”
Looking back to the house I grab Ava’s hand and we enter the never explored cave. The more we go into this deep cave, the more I become nervous, trying my best not to show it to Ava because I can’t see her cry again. I feel as if I hurt Ava so much and I regret fighting with Dad all the time, he is in grief. I look to Ava and I can see that she is tired from walking so much. We decide to take a break and sit down on a rock. Ava begins to shiver as the droplets of water begin to fall onto us. I sit next to her and warm her up.
“It is okay, just breathe,” I tell her as she shivers uncontrollably.
I can see her body begin to feel cold to the touch, she is freezing! Her skin turns into a pale blue colour and I begin to worry.
“Ava! What's wrong, Ava are you okay?” I ask her as she starts to slow her breathing and shut her eyes.
“AVA, STAY AWAKE, AVA!!!” I cry to her, not knowing what to do.
I pick her up as I hear no response and start to run back with her on my back. All I could think is how my mom told me to always take care of Ava and that I should never put any of us in danger, I promised her. And I just broke that promise. I run towards the house yelling for help, calling my Dad.
“DAD, DAD, AVA... THERE IS SOMETHING WRONG WITH HER”
I can see my Dad running as fast as I have ever seen him and take Ava from me. He places her on the ground and tells me go call mom. As we both look at each other, he realizes his mistake and I decide to call the ambulance before causing anymore sadness between us. The ambulance begins to fill the area, they try to help my sister. All I could see is blue and red flashing lights, the tormented look on my father's face as he watches his daughter, my sister, take her last breath. The rain hit all our bodies as we all stood in silence, the muddy grass stains my father’s jeans as he lays beside my sister, in disbelief my father exhales his breath full of sadness and grief.
I wipe a tear away thinking of my mother, and sister. My father was always miserable after Ava’s death. It was lifeless in the house after they both died, I felt terrible, it is all my fault.
I look back towards where I came from wanting to go back for the sake of the fox, it seems to be miles away. The air seems to quickly change and the ice seems to melt as I hear droplets of melted ice smack the cave ground. I begin to panic as it becomes darker and terribly mucky. I hear an ear wrenching noise coming from the fox, but sounds like a painful scream as I watch it change from a beautiful white fluffy fox into a terrible black fox. Did I do this to Ava, to my mom for breaking the promise, did I do this to my father? I broke his heart. I watch in disbelief as the fox begins to lose hair and weight. I try to blink it away, but when my eyes open I could see the fox giving me a vicious look, as if I'm it's next prey. This lovely dream becomes a nightmare. I decide to run, my breath quickens as I hear the fox follow behind me. I was never well at sports but I feel as if my legs are going faster than a cheetah, through this never ending cave.
The only thing I could think of is what I did to Ava, my mother and father, I do deserve this. All I want is my family back and my parents to hug me and tell me that it is just a bad dream. I do deserve this though, it is my fault that my father will never be happy again, it is all my fault, I shouldn’t have taken Ava into that cave, just like I shouldn’t have gone into this one. Just like Ava, the fox didn’t want to go into this cave either. My thoughts get suddenly disturbed as I see light at the end.
When I finally reach the only thing that was bright, my bare feet can feel the fleshy mud fill the space inbetween my toes and I can feel the grass prick on my naked body. The thick fog seems to fill the air rapidly, I look back to where I came from, but the ice cave now looks like a cave that I would never walk through. I begin to walk towards the dark damp trees as I get pricked on and cut.
When I make it to the end of this forest, I reach a cliff. I realize that the escarpment is filled with ready to explode volcanos and lava in every direction. I feel as if the sun may just be right above my head, as my body begins to heat up as I seem to drown in my own sweat, just as my body is clothed with tar. I look down towards my now scratched body and notice a snake slither its way up my leg. Spiders, centipedes, and a variety of abnormal bugs crawl towards me from all directions. I can feel my body being crushed and squeezed by this now huge snake and the bugs crawl into my mouth, nose and ears.
I want to scream for help, but I know no one will hear. The air gets snatched away from me, just as I am wrapped tighter in the snakes blanket. From panting so much I didn't realize that I have stopped breathing completely. I do not have to breathe, it doesn't hurt at all. Then it smacks me harder than a rock would of.
Am I dead?
The Awaken(Sarah B.)
The Awaken
The sunlight seeping through the featherlike clouds, brought a nice warmth to my bare body. I awake to a soft tickle on my nose, and a delicate purr coming from a beautiful white fox. He has the most beautiful icy blue eyes, such soft fluffy fur, his fur is so silky and pure.
As I get up from the semi-cold ground, I can feel the cold air hit me, along with shivers down my spine as the snow seeps through my naked feet. I’m not freezing but I realize it is cold and wintry as I see the white fog come from my breath. I feel a delicate tickle across my leg, to see the beautiful fox look up at me, swivelling around my ankles. My mind fills with confusion on why this fox is with me, and why I am here. I give attention to the view around me, as my mind fills with more confusion and fear of where I am. It does not bother me much because the beautiful white, snow covered ground that is topped with beautiful hills and icy mountains that seem to go on forever, like a blanket the skies drape the pleasing view, which brings a comforting feeling to my body. The view is so beautiful it takes away my confusion and fear. This place is all the things I love put into one area. Maybe i’m in a dream, because everything seems to be so perfect.
As I wander the beautiful area I realize that i’m alone and decide to call it Dreamland. For some reason the beautiful fox seems to be following me everywhere I go, he’s like my little guardian in my dream. After wandering for what seems to be hours, I finally find something interesting, a beautiful ice cave. The fox gives me a different look than usual. I decide to enter the cave without having any second thoughts. As I enter, I am suddenly hit with a different feeling, an unusual feeling. The fox seems to be telling me not to go as I see his face change to a sad expression, but why should I even listen to an animal. I decide to go in further.
The more I enter this beautiful ice cave the more nervous I seem to get. I look to the fox to see he is becoming weak, tired and he looks like he is scared or cold by the shivers. Then it hits me, a memory I never want to remember.
“Mia I don’t want to go in,” my little sister said in a whining tone.
“Come on it’s not even that bad Ava,” I tell her.
As she looks at me I can tell she is about to cry and run back to Dad, for some reason ever since our Mom died all Ava can do is cry and run to Dad. My Dad would just sit there and do nothing about it, he isn’t taking the role of a father anymore. We tend to always be fighting, which is probably why Ava is always so sad.
“Come on, it’ll be fun, there is nothing to be worried about,” I reassure her.
“What about Dad, won’t he miss us?” she asks as she catches her breath.
I laugh, “Ava, do you really think I’ll just leave Dad alone, he needs us.”
“But… but it looks scary,” she whimpers as she looks into the cave.
“Ava, we will be back just before dinner and I’ll hold your hand the whole time, there is nothing to be afraid of,” comforting her just like our mom did.
“But...but”
“I will be with you the whole time”
Looking back to the house I grab Ava’s hand and we enter the never explored cave. The more we go into this deep cave, the more I become nervous, trying my best not to show it to Ava because I can’t see her cry again. I feel as if I hurt Ava so much and I regret fighting with Dad all the time, he is in grief. I look to Ava and I can see that she is tired from walking so much. We decide to take a break and sit down on a rock. Ava begins to shiver as the droplets of water begin to fall onto us. I sit next to her and warm her up.
“It is okay, just breathe,” I tell her as she shivers uncontrollably.
I can see her body begin to feel cold to the touch, she is freezing! Her skin turns into a pale blue colour and I begin to worry.
“Ava! What's wrong, Ava are you okay?” I ask her as she starts to slow her breathing and shut her eyes.
“AVA, STAY AWAKE, AVA!!!” I cry to her, not knowing what to do.
I pick her up as I hear no response and start to run back with her on my back. All I could think is how my mom told me to always take care of Ava and that I should never put any of us in danger, I promised her. And I just broke that promise. I run towards the house yelling for help, calling my Dad.
“DAD, DAD, AVA... THERE IS SOMETHING WRONG WITH HER”
I can see my Dad running as fast as I have ever seen him and take Ava from me. He places her on the ground and tells me go call mom. As we both look at each other, he realizes his mistake and I decide to call the ambulance before causing anymore sadness between us. The ambulance begins to fill the area, they try to help my sister. All I could see is blue and red flashing lights, the tormented look on my father's face as he watches his daughter, my sister, take her last breath. The rain hit all our bodies as we all stood in silence, the muddy grass stains my father’s jeans as he lays beside my sister, in disbelief my father exhales his breath full of sadness and grief.
I wipe a tear away thinking of my mother, and sister. My father was always miserable after Ava’s death. It was lifeless in the house after they both died, I felt terrible, it is all my fault.
I look back towards where I came from wanting to go back for the sake of the fox, it seems to be miles away. The air seems to quickly change and the ice seems to melt as I hear droplets of melted ice smack the cave ground. I begin to panic as it becomes darker and terribly mucky. I hear an ear wrenching noise coming from the fox, but sounds like a painful scream as I watch it change from a beautiful white fluffy fox into a terrible black fox. Did I do this to Ava, to my mom for breaking the promise, did I do this to my father? I broke his heart. I watch in disbelief as the fox begins to lose hair and weight. I try to blink it away, but when my eyes open I could see the fox giving me a vicious look, as if I'm it's next prey. This lovely dream becomes a nightmare. I decide to run, my breath quickens as I hear the fox follow behind me. I was never well at sports but I feel as if my legs are going faster than a cheetah, through this never ending cave.
The only thing I could think of is what I did to Ava, my mother and father, I do deserve this. All I want is my family back and my parents to hug me and tell me that it is just a bad dream. I do deserve this though, it is my fault that my father will never be happy again, it is all my fault, I shouldn’t have taken Ava into that cave, just like I shouldn’t have gone into this one. Just like Ava, the fox didn’t want to go into this cave either. My thoughts get suddenly disturbed as I see light at the end.
When I finally reach the only thing that was bright, my bare feet can feel the fleshy mud fill the space inbetween my toes and I can feel the grass prick on my naked body. The thick fog seems to fill the air rapidly, I look back to where I came from, but the ice cave now looks like a cave that I would never walk through. I begin to walk towards the dark damp trees as I get pricked on and cut.
When I make it to the end of this forest, I reach a cliff. I realize that the escarpment is filled with ready to explode volcanos and lava in every direction. I feel as if the sun may just be right above my head, as my body begins to heat up as I seem to drown in my own sweat, just as my body is clothed with tar. I look down towards my now scratched body and notice a snake slither its way up my leg. Spiders, centipedes, and a variety of abnormal bugs crawl towards me from all directions. I can feel my body being crushed and squeezed by this now huge snake and the bugs crawl into my mouth, nose and ears.
I want to scream for help, but I know no one will hear. The air gets snatched away from me, just as I am wrapped tighter in the snakes blanket. From panting so much I didn't realize that I have stopped breathing completely. I do not have to breathe, it doesn't hurt at all. Then it smacks me harder than a rock would of.
Am I dead?
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Kevin Hughes
11/11/2018Sarah,
I don't usually read "horror" because it sticks with me and makes me sad. This story did make me sad too. But...it made me marvel at the vivid imagery inside- the symbols, the feelings, the emotions, and the great range of all three. A Freudian or Jungian Shrink would have a wonderful time with this story and its "dreamscape."
Wonderful. Sad, pretty, and imaginative. Good job.
Smiles, Kevin
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