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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: Death / Heartbreak / Loss
- Published: 02/07/2012
Just a Life Abandoned
Born 1949, M, from NLR /Arkansas, United StatesThey'd heard talk of him; a smelly old man that lived in a filthy old abandoned house. For years he'd been living there living like a hermit! He never had visitors. The old abandoned house was just on the outskirts of the city.
They wanted to learn more about him, so they decided that they would pay him an unannounced visit.
They entered the smelly old abandoned house through an opening where it appeared a door had been standing. They found the smelly old man lying upon the filthy floor of the smelly old abandoned house; the floor was littered with all the filth he and the abandoned house had accumulated over time.
Suddenly, the old man lifted himself from the floor! The men jumped! Afraid of how the old fella might react to the intrusion! They were looking down into his face and he was looking up into theirs.
He showed calmness that they had not expected!
"Hello"
"Hello" they said. But not introducing themselves!
He fingered his nose and the whiskers upon his face.
"Would you like to leave this smelly old abandoned house and come back to the city with us? Would you?" the men said.
Then the old man began speaking; speaking in a shaky and sober tone.
"Some years ago I killed a man in a jealous rage; every night I try to find sleep but I just can't find no sleep! Every night instant replay!
You can't take back a life that you've already taken!
This is my punishment!
I killed a man and now I"ve abandoned life!"
The men walked out of that smelly old abandoned house, leaving the old man to himself and his demons!
They walked away with a flood of tears streaming down from their eyes!
Just a Life Abandoned(Dorsey Baker)
They'd heard talk of him; a smelly old man that lived in a filthy old abandoned house. For years he'd been living there living like a hermit! He never had visitors. The old abandoned house was just on the outskirts of the city.
They wanted to learn more about him, so they decided that they would pay him an unannounced visit.
They entered the smelly old abandoned house through an opening where it appeared a door had been standing. They found the smelly old man lying upon the filthy floor of the smelly old abandoned house; the floor was littered with all the filth he and the abandoned house had accumulated over time.
Suddenly, the old man lifted himself from the floor! The men jumped! Afraid of how the old fella might react to the intrusion! They were looking down into his face and he was looking up into theirs.
He showed calmness that they had not expected!
"Hello"
"Hello" they said. But not introducing themselves!
He fingered his nose and the whiskers upon his face.
"Would you like to leave this smelly old abandoned house and come back to the city with us? Would you?" the men said.
Then the old man began speaking; speaking in a shaky and sober tone.
"Some years ago I killed a man in a jealous rage; every night I try to find sleep but I just can't find no sleep! Every night instant replay!
You can't take back a life that you've already taken!
This is my punishment!
I killed a man and now I"ve abandoned life!"
The men walked out of that smelly old abandoned house, leaving the old man to himself and his demons!
They walked away with a flood of tears streaming down from their eyes!
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