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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: Poems & Songs
- Published: 09/09/2020
A Vile Verse
Born 1976, M, from Whitechapel, AustraliaPoison’s sting laced through the verse,
Scripture tossed doth land perverse.
Spitting flowers, not sweet, but terse,
Cause gathered good to soon disperse.
Trumpets herald coming doom,
Freshened air stales in the tomb.
Eardrums split by sonic boom,
All penetrate the peaceful womb.
Unwanted lost becomes ill-found,
Rupturing the stable ground.
From Heaven’s shores to Hades bound,
Here comes the nauseating sound.
Forward march the dogs of war,
Pleasures wear the cloth of chore.
Stagnation is momentum’s whore,
Darkness grows from sun on spore.
A Vile Verse(Jason James Parker)
Poison’s sting laced through the verse,
Scripture tossed doth land perverse.
Spitting flowers, not sweet, but terse,
Cause gathered good to soon disperse.
Trumpets herald coming doom,
Freshened air stales in the tomb.
Eardrums split by sonic boom,
All penetrate the peaceful womb.
Unwanted lost becomes ill-found,
Rupturing the stable ground.
From Heaven’s shores to Hades bound,
Here comes the nauseating sound.
Forward march the dogs of war,
Pleasures wear the cloth of chore.
Stagnation is momentum’s whore,
Darkness grows from sun on spore.
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Kanishka Roy
09/15/2020The title refers not one but two vile verses.....one being this poem itself. And that for me is a work of art! Its damn clever and poetic!
Awesome as always:D
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Jason James Parker
09/16/2020Thank you, Kanishka. I appreciate the way you read and apply such perception to a piece. Your comments are always supportive. : )
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Aciis Khatiwada
09/13/2020"Trumpets herald coming doom,
Freshened air stales in the tomb.
Eardrums split by sonic boom,
All penetrate the peaceful womb. "
This is a beauty. I adore words that paints the scene in my eyes as i read them.
I need lessons from you on writing verses of this quality . Amazing work Bro!
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Jason James Parker
09/14/2020Thank you, Aciis! I spend a lot of time arranging and rearranging words until the rhythm and--most importantly--the meaning are right, so thank you for your very kind comments. : )
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Jane Lockyer Willis
09/13/2020Clever use of rhyming couplets which is an effective method of illustrating the cynicism portrayed in this piece.
Your use of figures of speech also impressive. 'Stagnation is momentum's whore...' Great personification.
A bleak poem that challenges the reader, containing strong disturbing imagery.
I think this is a brilliant poem. it challenges, the Scriptures, Am I right Jason?
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Jason James Parker
09/13/2020Thank you for your comments, Jane--I love the way you think. The Scriptures were certainly on my mind--especially the way they're so often misused as a pointed stick. In the right hands, those very same verses can serve as guidance and comfort.
This a piece that's saturated by its own contradictions (a damning jibe at damnation itself). You're always so good at picking out specific lines that I've spent the most time on--you have a keen eye. : )
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Jason James Parker
09/11/2020Thank you so much, Douglas. Your comment has really given me a boost : )
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JD
09/14/2020Hard to get worse than perverse, Jason! But I won't be terse, nor make you rehearse anything worse than perverse!
Happy Short Story STAR of the Day to you! :-)
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